Peer Review on Calvin's WA2 essay

The essay written by Calvin was clear and easy to understand. The introduction and thesis statement clearly show his stand on the question of the writing assigment. The introduction of the essay also guided the reader on the direction the essay was going. In the thesis statement, Calvin believed that international leaders should not focus primarily on sulfur particles as the way to combat climate change. This thesis statement was well supported by mentioning that there are other better and effective solutions in solving global warming. In the second paragraph, Calvin could have mentioned that among the negative impacts from the use of SRM, the side effects on nature is the most alarming. This is necessary because in the next paragraph, Calvin chose to elaborate on the dangers SRM bring about to nature. The other solution suggested was well supported with findings from further readings. From one paragraph to another, the essay was quite well linked with the use of proper transitions giving the reader advance signal on what to expect next. The conclusion summarises the key points of the argument. Lastly, the order of the references at the end of the essay should be arranged in alphabetical order according to the surname of the author.

Blog 4 - Summary of Article 3

This essay emphasises on the importance of having a good leader to be in charge of the negotiations at the Copenhagen conference on Climate. Unfortunately, the host country, Denmark, is unlikely to take the leadership role for the conference as they do not have a suitable candidate for the job. However, the conference needs a well established leader who is just, dynamic, dedicated and knowledgeable on the topic of the debate. Some of the experienced lead negotiators quoted by the writer are Jean-Maurice Ripert, Tommy Koh and Angela Merkel. Ripert is known as someone who is optimistic and well aware of the needs of other delegates. On top of that, he even went the extra mile in understanding the thinking of delegates by consulting them privately. As for Koh, he commanded daily results of the conference from the delegates and take the full responsibility when he sense that an area was not going to succeed. As demonstrated by Ripert, a lead negotiator should take responsibility in declaring consensus which has been reached throughout the conference and at the same time justify it. To conclude, the qualities and capabilities shown by Merkel, Ripert and Koh are some of the examples that a good leader should have.

Peer Review of Calvin Essay

The essay written was well written in the sense that it is well organised. The idea being brought up was well supported with relevant examples. In-text citation being used adhered to the APA style which is recommended for our level of writing. The use of appropriate conjunction in between sentences makes the points being well linked to ensure a smooth flow of the essay. Facts included in the essay was accurate as additional research was being done especially for the part for biofuels. Introduction of the essay prepares the reader of what to expect. On top of that, the use of block organisation makes the essay much easier to understand. The thesis statement which mention about human and nature working together in combating climate change sets the path of the essay. In order to further improve on the quality of the essay, more examples about how the people can contribute to reduce climate change. In this way, the essay will be more balanced rather than too focused on the nature aspects. Lastly, the conclusion summarizes the key point of each paragraph very well.

Introduction to myself

My name is Muhammad Fadzil. I am a second year student from Mechanical Engineering. An introduction about me would be someone who is very simple, cheerful and shy at times. Some of my interests and hobbies include soccer, cars and motorcycles as well. I used to be active in soccer during my primary and secondary school days where I can play soccer almost every day without complaining. As years goes by, I have lesser and lesser time to play soccer due to the higher level of commitment involved in my tertiary studies. All I can manage to do now is basically watching soccer games which are being played on the television. Apart from soccer, I also enjoy learning about bikes and cars just as much as I enjoy riding and driving them. My sources of gaining knowledge and updating about bikes and cars come from the internet, friends and also the vehicle mechanics. It is fascinating to see how the advances in technology have resulted to the more and more sophisticated machines which have been produced today in the market.
Probably the question on what was I doing out there before I started my education in NUS might already strike some of your mind. Well, after graduating from my polytechnics studies in Ngee Ann Polytechnic, I went on to serve the National Service for 2 years. I was in the Singapore Police Force where I was posted to the Police MRT Unit. The unit’s job is to deter and detect potential terrorist attacks in the public transport network system. Being posted to the Police MRT Unit has allowed me to gain adequate policing knowledge and also incident management techniques which is an added advantage. Not everyone will have the chance to do so.
After serving two years of national service, here I am, doing my degree studies in NUS. During this semester, I am required to read the module EG1471 English for Academic Purposes. I certainly hope I can improve my English and learn about the various writing skills. This will be a useful tool throughout my studies in NUS and also at the same time preparing myself for the working industry in the future. This module is very important as it is a lifetime skill which you will make use of everyday in your life. In fact, English is an international language being used as a form of communication. Finally, I expect myself to be more confident in my writing at the end of the semester after completing this module.