Peer Review on Calvin's WA2 essay

The essay written by Calvin was clear and easy to understand. The introduction and thesis statement clearly show his stand on the question of the writing assigment. The introduction of the essay also guided the reader on the direction the essay was going. In the thesis statement, Calvin believed that international leaders should not focus primarily on sulfur particles as the way to combat climate change. This thesis statement was well supported by mentioning that there are other better and effective solutions in solving global warming. In the second paragraph, Calvin could have mentioned that among the negative impacts from the use of SRM, the side effects on nature is the most alarming. This is necessary because in the next paragraph, Calvin chose to elaborate on the dangers SRM bring about to nature. The other solution suggested was well supported with findings from further readings. From one paragraph to another, the essay was quite well linked with the use of proper transitions giving the reader advance signal on what to expect next. The conclusion summarises the key points of the argument. Lastly, the order of the references at the end of the essay should be arranged in alphabetical order according to the surname of the author.