Friday, February 26, 2010
Peer Review of Calvin Essay
The essay written was well written in the sense that it is well organised. The idea being brought up was well supported with relevant examples. In-text citation being used adhered to the APA style which is recommended for our level of writing. The use of appropriate conjunction in between sentences makes the points being well linked to ensure a smooth flow of the essay. Facts included in the essay was accurate as additional research was being done especially for the part for biofuels. Introduction of the essay prepares the reader of what to expect. On top of that, the use of block organisation makes the essay much easier to understand. The thesis statement which mention about human and nature working together in combating climate change sets the path of the essay. In order to further improve on the quality of the essay, more examples about how the people can contribute to reduce climate change. In this way, the essay will be more balanced rather than too focused on the nature aspects. Lastly, the conclusion summarizes the key point of each paragraph very well.
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Hi Fadzil, thanks for the feedback on my essay. I think I may have written in such a way that nature aspects have been emphasized much more than human aspects in fighting climate change.
ReplyDeleteNevertheless, allow me to explain this part. The human's role is rather on adapting to ways of combating global warming through the use of ecosystems (Mangroves) and new technological inventions (Biofuel). Likewise, there is also an example on the support and effort of human in implementing ways (REDD) that nature and human can coexist solve the issues of climate change, particularly in developing countries.
Hope my explanation is able to answer your doubts.